tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6720094354930893856.post3049629010756132583..comments2023-09-05T00:35:04.155-07:00Comments on Simon J. Bloyce C.G. Arts & Animation student.: Aarghh. Story Synopsis. Constructive criticism required please.Simon James Bloyce (Monkfish)http://www.blogger.com/profile/10274367345366034116noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6720094354930893856.post-5215350008647834162013-03-10T03:52:50.228-07:002013-03-10T03:52:50.228-07:00OGR 10/03/2013
Hey Simon - nothing on here re. &#...OGR 10/03/2013<br /><br />Hey Simon - nothing on here re. 'Fantastic Voyage'? :(tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6720094354930893856.post-57461304598667301802013-01-24T11:33:04.925-08:002013-01-24T11:33:04.925-08:00OGR 24/01/2013
Hi Simon,
Okay - this is a trunca...OGR 24/01/2013<br /><br />Hi Simon,<br /><br />Okay - this is a truncated version of our 'brainstorming-while-plugging-in-lightboxes' session on Tuesday... so<br /><br />1 cat wants 1 fish; elsewhere in the petshop, 1 dangerous dog is leaping up and down in its enclosure; fish outsmarts cat x number of times, before replacing cat's ACME oxygen tank with helium gas; cat inflates, fish pops cat-balloon, cat drops into dog enclosure - or variations on that theme. Just feels nice and tidy - and in a classic tradition.<br /><br />In terms of the fish-outsmarts-cat gags, usually a set of 3, with each gag escalating in complexity and pain satisfies the structure, with the 4th attempt being the one that concludes the narrative (i.e. helium balloon gag).<br /><br />Anyway - it would be good to see an OGR style document on here before too long with your latest premise and logline etc.tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6720094354930893856.post-43668167306788957912013-01-20T03:58:32.769-08:002013-01-20T03:58:32.769-08:00Hey Simon,
See link!
http://ucarochester-cgartsa...Hey Simon,<br /><br />See link!<br /><br />http://ucarochester-cgartsandanimation.blogspot.co.uk/2013/01/fao-cgaa-years-1-2-uca-student-survey.html<br /><br />Cheers! :Dtutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6720094354930893856.post-11291205331814002013-01-19T09:17:56.146-08:002013-01-19T09:17:56.146-08:00Hi Simon,
I'm actually experiencing difficult...Hi Simon,<br /><br />I'm actually experiencing difficulty in following the action of your break-down here - I'm a bit confused by the goals of your characters; you've got a mouse that has a stash of ... fish? Or is it something else? The cat wants the stash - or the fish? (And if not the fish, why not the fish, if he's a cat?). Is the mouse living in the pet shop - and is it actually important that they're both thieves? There maybe some issues with Act 1 and 2, which is why Act 3 isn't clear, and if the helium balloon is causing you some head-scratching, how about putting it into act 1, or building more of your narrative around it. The idea of a cat using a helium balloon as its mechanism for gaining entry makes good sense, for example. Personally speaking, the idea of the fish outwitting the cat in Act 3 is pleasing - so do you even need a mouse in the mix?<br /><br />Also - I notice that you're not actually following any of your classmate's blogs, which must be isolating for you: see below:<br /><br />http://peta-gayebrown.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://lektirose.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://kinblob.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://katyfosdike1.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://meganhowett.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://a-animator.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://dhuranmodha.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://georgenwosisi.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://samantha-niemczyk.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://vikkirh.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://alexnedmonds.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://shannonkmason.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://jakejbryant.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://george-hind.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://emily-clarkson.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://meg-leslie.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://aaronhayre.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://planetmonkfish.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://lucy-yelding.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://vickymhatton.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://mattman12.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://jbobbettblogit.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://kymmumford.blogspot.co.uk/<br />http://nadiayadallee.blogspot.co.uk/tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com