I am a first year CG Arts and Animation student and this is where my work lives. I hope you enjoy what you see, feel free to comment on anything.
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Tuesday 25 October 2011
Unit 2 / Space / Film Review 1 / The Cabinet of Dr. Caligari 1920
Very encouraging to see you keeping on top of your reviews. That said, they're a little 'content-lite' and instead of marooning your three quotes at the end of your reviews like islands, you need to integrate quotes into your argument - use them proactively to enhance and scaffold the points you're trying to make. Your reviews give the impression of being written without much wider reading or preparation. I want you to take a look at Chrissie or Emma or Meg's film reviews, because they're very satisfying in terms of content, academic 'voice' and structure.
Hey Simon,
ReplyDeleteVery encouraging to see you keeping on top of your reviews. That said, they're a little 'content-lite' and instead of marooning your three quotes at the end of your reviews like islands, you need to integrate quotes into your argument - use them proactively to enhance and scaffold the points you're trying to make. Your reviews give the impression of being written without much wider reading or preparation. I want you to take a look at Chrissie or Emma or Meg's film reviews, because they're very satisfying in terms of content, academic 'voice' and structure.
http://meg-leslie.blogspot.com/2011/10/fritz-langs-metropolis-1927.html
http://small-brown-dog.blogspot.com/2011/10/film-review-cabinet-of-dr-caligari.html
http://emma-foster.blogspot.com/2011/10/film-review-cabinet-of-dr-caligari-1920.html